Okay, let's start. Hm, not a good sign
that they say that a sequel is in the works before the start of the
book. That's like saying “NO NO THIS IS SO AWESOME YOU'LL WANT TO
KEEP READING NO WORRIES WE'RE ON IT!” or “THE AUTHOR IS SLOPPY SO
THIS BOOK WON'T HAVE A PROPER ENDING” I am also being told that
this is not a real story when it describes it's self as a
supernatural romance with a twist, again, in just those first few
junk pages. Not a good start.
...Dedicated “For Niall. The Master
of my universe” I'm getting scared. Oh, this is her husband. ...
I'm going to hold off on a snarky comment about feminism because if
this is BDSM then this could be fair play, but I want you to know
that I'm holding it in.
Okay. Opening up with a our unnamed
narrator fighting with her hair and given an incredibly simple and
generic description (light brown hair, too big blue eyes) and she's
peeved that her room mate has fallen prey to the plague and now has
to go drive to Seattle (yay! We're getting a setting!) to meet, and I
quote “the
enigmatic CEO of Grey Enterprises Holdings Inc ” for an
interview in her place ... Didn't you just say that you had never
heard of this dude like, three lines ago narrator? I AM SUSPECT!
Okay,
we meet the sickly room mate (and BFFF (they are so close they get an
extra F.)) Kate. Kate is sickly and can hardly speak, and she
explains to us why it is SO IMPORTANT that Ana (she has a name now!
Yay!) does this interview for her. We're also told how super duper
pretty and awesome and wonderful she is, and the writer does a decent
job of setting up the that our narrator is a Nice Girl because even
bitter about having to do this interview, she's still medicating and
making soup for her sick BFFF (say it with me now, “Awwww”).
Except, well, if this super duper wonderful BFFF Kate is the editor
of the school paper, wouldn't she have OTHER reporters to call upon
rather then her room mate? You know, people who actually KNOW how to
do this? The narrator is telling us how wonderful and super awesome
Kate is (she's even hot sick!) but, well, Kate is seeming a bit like
a jerk to me here.
She's
sick, and has her room mate fussing over her (making soup, fetching
medication) and going to this ZOMG SUPER HUGE IMPORTANT interview for
her. Why not get another one of her reporters to do it? Is she afraid
they won't let her write the story and all the hard work to GET the
interview will be for nothing? Why not do it over the phone? We're
told her voice is raspy and awful, but you know what? When I was 12 I
managed to do competitive public speaking in front of a crowd full of
strangers with no voice*, I think she could manage a phone interview
rather then throwing her BFFF under the bus even if she was rasping.
She also says “And thanks Ana – as usual, you’re my
lifesaver.” Which to me means that Kate is often throwing Ana
into these obscene situations because she knows Ana will go along
with it. So, narrator, I am not believing you when you say Kate is
super duper awesome. She sounds like kind of a jerk to me so far. So
I'm going to put my bets on Ana being in secret love with her, and
Kate totally knows and uses it to manipulate her. Fingers crossed for
a threesome later in the series!
Still,
I'm being a picky jerk. This is all just to get Ana and the male lead
(the “enigmatic CEO” obvs) introduced so that they can bone,
right? Let's keep reading.
"It’s
early, and I don’t have to be in Seattle until two this
afternoon.”
time for a nice and relaxed drive in Kate's borrowed sporty Mercedes!
And by “relaxed” the Ana “puts the pedal to the medal”
“It’s
a quarter to two when I arrive, greatly relieved that I’m not late”
WHAT? You were just talking about how the roads were empty, you were
speeding, and talking like you had time to kill. CONTINUITY. THIS IS
IN THE SAME PARAGRAPH GUYS!
You
know, some libraries were saying they didn't want to carry Fifty
Shades of Grey because of the level of writing in this book. I
thought that was a bit strange. I mean, I've read “Dick and Jane”.
There's nothing special about those pros, but, well, “She’s
wearing the sharpest charcoal suit jacket and white shirt I have ever
seen.” I've read this line about seven times. It took me about
six times for that sentences to read right to me. It still leaves me
with Questions about this receptionist that was just described. Is
she naked from the waist down? Also, is her suit jacket made of
razors and pointy things?
Moving
on. ... We just got the narrator's full name. Anastasia
Steele. Fuck.
Alright,
so, I'm just going to throw this up here. She smiles kindly at me,
amused no doubt, as I sign in. And why is our receptionist amused
at Anastasia Steele? Is it because she has a ridiculous name? Because
if I were named Anastasia Steele I would be self conscious about
that. However, despite seeming super sensitive to what people are
thinking about her, Ana doesn't seem to notice the name thing (maybe
it will come up later?) but no, she thinks that the receptionist is
amused at her despite a kindly smile because the receptionist is so
pristine and Ana's hair is falling out of her pony tail and she's
dressed not super office-y, but in a skirt, with boots and a sweater!
I don't think Ana here and I are going to be friends :(
Ugh.
Now she's self conscious because the security guards are better
dressed then her in their suits. Okay, I get that we're supposed to
get that Ana is a fish out of water here at this super fancy
building, and that everyone and thing here is all the fancy all the
time. I get that. And yet I still feel that now that you have a
visitor badge with ANASATIA STEELE written on it, she should have
bigger things to be hung up on.
“The
elevator whisks me with terminal velocity to the twentieth floor.” ALL TERMINAL VELOCTY MEANS IS THAT YOU ARE MOVING AT A
CONSTANT SPEED DETERMINED BY THE WHEIGHT OF THE OBJECT AND USUALLY
REFERS TO DOWNWARD MOVEMENT AND YOU ARE GOING UP!
“...inwardly
cursing Kate for not providing me with a brief biography. I know
nothing about this man I’m about to interview. He could be ninety
or he could be thirty.” Then how did you know he was enigmatic
Ana? J'ACUSE! Seriously though, while Kate was convincing her and
she said “But I don't know anything about him!” Kate didn't give
her a quick and dirty break down? Another point in favor of my
“Kate's a jerk” theory! Or at very least way less awesome and
together as the text is trying to make her sound. Earlier they
mention that she lends Ana her Mercedes. ... She's a college student
what the living hell is she doing with a Mercedes?! Maybe Kate is the
girlfriend of a mob boss?
Still,
I bet I can guess what this guy looks like. I mean, he is a
vampire right? I'm going to say he looks to be mid twenties have... Hmm, thick dark hair, with intense grey eyes (since
she has the blue, and his name is Grey), a strong jaw, and a smirk.
Oh, and tall and well toned. Let's not forget tall and well toned.
Ana
has a guess, too! “Judging from the building, which is too
clinical and modern, I guess Grey is in his forties: fit, tanned, and
fair-haired to match the rest of the personnel.” I wanna add
“pale as fuck” to my above list now. Also we have not heard a
peep about facial hair thus far, so not sure how that is matching. If
the blond receptionist had a beard, I don't think Ana would feel so
self conscious about being Such! A! Slob! Also, can vampires grow
facial hair?
“Another
elegant, flawlessly dressed blonde comes out of a large door to the
right. What is it with all the immaculate blondes? It’s like
Stepford here.” Because your author couldn't think of a better
way to Other you. You couldn't have been anything other then pasty
white (no, we haven't been told she is yet, but if she were not-white
we'd have her feeling out of place for other reasons).
“when
the office door opens and a tall, elegantly dressed, attractive
African-American man with short dreads exits. ” The male lead
is a black dude with dreads?! AWESOME! ”He turns and says
through the door. “Golf, this week, Grey.”" Tease.
"I
push open the door and stumble through, tripping over my own feet,
and falling head first into the office.
Double
crap – me and my two left feet! I am on my hands and knees in the
doorway to Mr. Grey’s office, and gentle hands are around me
helping me to stand. I am so embarrassed, damn my clumsiness. I
have to steel myself to glance up. Holy cow – he’s so young.
Okay,
so, a few things here. First, I actually like the phrase double crap.
Second, are we not even trying to hide the fact that this is supposed
to be Bella Swan from Twilight? OH NO I AM ACCIDENT PRONE
*trips/faints/pratfalls into the arms of nearest attractive male who
falls hopelessly in love with her*
I want to see the heroin of one of these books who is both “common
looking” AND has cat like grace.
Also,
guys, are you as shocked as I am that Grey, the super important man
with an army of Perfect Blonds is shockingly young? I mean, who else
is going to have a blond only hiring policy?
“So
young – and attractive, very attractive. He’s tall, dressed in a
fine gray suit, white shirt, and black tie with unruly dark copper
colored hair and intense, bright gray eyes that regard me shrewdly.
It takes a moment for me to find my voice.” CALLED IT! Well, no
smirk. Yet. Also, get it, he wears grey and has grey eyes
BECAUSE OF HIS NAME LOLOLOLOLOL pleasekillme.
“If
this guy is over thirty then I’m a monkey’s uncle." HAH
HOPE YOU ENJOY BEING RELATED TO MONKEYS BECAUSE DUDE'S LIKE 100! You
know, I want to see a vampire who has a very specific number for age.
I want to meet one who's 147. And celebrates his birthday (or death
day? Which would a vampire celebrate?). Also we are now told that
Kate and Ana study English, and go to Washington state, if you were
wondering.
I
will give the author some points here. She has been giving us setting
and little things about the characters in ways that aren't super
intrusive. Yes, we got the I AM LOOKING IN A MIRROR for the opening
to describe Ana, but, well, at least she didn't go on to say “I AM
21 AND STUDYING ENGLISH AND MY BFFF IS KATE WHO IS ALSO STUDYING
ENGLISH AND WE LIVE TOGETHER AND SOMETIMES I SNEAK INTO HER ROOM AT
NIGHT AND SMELL HER”.
“I
think I see the ghost of a smile in his expression, but I’m not
sure.” Can I count that as a smirk?
Okay,
and everything in the building as been steel and sandstone and glass
so far. Grey's office, however, is “In front of the
floor-to-ceiling windows, there’s a huge modern dark-wood desk that
six people could comfortably eat around. It matches the coffee table
by the couch. Everything else is white – ceiling, floors, and walls
except, on the wall by the door, where a mosaic of small paintings
hang, thirty-six of them arranged in a square. They are exquisite –
a series of mundane, forgotten objects painted in such precise detail
they look like photographs. Displayed together, they are
breathtaking.” All. White. Sterile, surgical. Has anyone ever
spent any large amount of time in an all white room? I feel like it
would drive you insane. Like looking at a Great Old One. Also, holy
crap, how fast do you COUNT Ana? Thirty-six. Just that quickly.
They're not just a series arranged, there are thirty-six arranged.
"Next,
I set up the mini-disc recorder and am all fingers and thumbs,
dropping it twice on the coffee table in front of me. Mr. Grey says
nothing, waiting patiently – I hope – as I become increasingly
embarrassed and flustered." That is a task that sounds like it
NEEDS mostly fingers and thumbs, Ana. Also, I want to point this out.
Before, with all the blonds, she was being giggled and laughed at in
her mind, now that it's the “Adonis” Mr. Christian Grey he's, by
her perception, being patient. If I turn this into a drinking game,
I'm going to add “every time Ana assumes what people are thinking
about her and is likely wrong” to the list. Yup, a little further
down, he's suppressing a smile OR SMIRKING?! No? Not yet. I'll get
that last point, God Damn it!
Ana
fumbles around with the tape recorder some more, and then once it's
all set up asks Grey if he minds her recording it, he snarks her with “After you’ve taken so much trouble to set up the recorder –
you ask me now?” and I admit, I kind of like this exchange. I
was sad when after she freezes and panics because OMG PRETTY BOY I AM
SO FLUSTERED AND CUTE! Seriously, she's a university senior about to
graduate, even though she's not supposed to be feminine, it strikes
me as strange that she'd still get THIS flustered just because he's
pretty. Oh, God, they're setting her up to be a virgin for him to
deflower, aren't we? Ugh.
Okay,
some more actually kind of fun banter (from him, that is) and we find
out he's giving out the degrees at the graduation ceremony she's
about to attend. ... Wait, isn't that usually just faculty? Or is
this just an American thing? She then starts reading Kate's
questions. "His smile is rueful, but he looks vaguely
disappointed." BECAUSE HE EXPECTED A MORE INTERESTING QUESTION OUT
OF YOU ANA! DUH! HE ONLY CARES WHAT YOU HAVE TO SAY! SCRAP KATE'S
QUESTIONS QUICK! OTHERWISE HE WON'T LIKE YOU! Ahem. Sorry about that.
Be
pauses and fixes me with his gray stare. “My belief is to achieve
success in any scheme one has to make oneself master of that scheme,
know it inside and out, know every detail." LIKE HE WILL IN MAKING
YOU HIS LOVE SLAVE.
“Maybe
you’re just lucky.” This isn’t on Kate’s list – but he’s
so arrogant. His eyes flare momentarily in surprise" OH SNAP. We
then get this “You sound like a control freak.” The words are
out of my mouth before I can stop them. ... So seconds ago she
was all ZOMG PRETTY BOY I AM FLUSHED AND AWKWARD and before that she
was freaking out because all she knew was he was this big shot CEO
guy. Everything we have seen of Ana so far as been trying to paint
her as a Nice Timid Shy Girl. Now she's calling him a control freak
(he doesn't deny this, and then distracts her with some hawt lower
lip stroking action). She has totally abandoned the questions Kate
gave her/wanted for her article, by the way, and we barely made it
one in. Or at least, I think she has? The narration is unclear here.
"“Besides,
immense power is acquired by assuring yourself in your secret
reveries that you were born to control things,” he continues, his
voice soft."
What the double-crap does this even mean? This strikes me as creepy.
I know it's supposed to be setting us up for “HE'S INTO BDSM”
but, well, this just strikes me as the type of logic that people used
for keeping slaves. It's just drenched in entitlement. Also, I
dislike the stereotype that BDSM** relationships have total control
in them like this. There's still a level of respect in the
relationship it's self, even if the sex is all about control, and in
the end, the Sub has the safe word to bring everything to a
screeching halt, and if they don't, I can't imagine that they'd stick
around. Just sayin'.
The
interview continues, and Grey is being a rich, spoiled, and entitled,
and Ana flips between ZOMG PRETTY and “You are an arrogant douche”.
We're also getting hints of sexy tiemz to come dropped in with
“wicked thoughts” in his eyes. He keeps making Ana uncomfortable
with his intense gazes. I feel this is important for another reason.
She isn't “I am uncomfortable because my raging boner is making it
hard to sit” he is making her authentically uncomfortable with his
pointed, intense stares. She goes back to Kate's questions at this
point.
"“Possibly.
Though there are people who’d say I don’t have a heart.”
“Why
would they say that?”
“Because
they know me well.” His lip curls in a wry smile."
Fuck
you. Sorry, had to get that out there.
"“Would
your friends say you’re easy to get to know?” And I regret the
question as soon as I say it. It’s not on Kate’s list."
Really? How many questions have you asked that aren't by now Ana? Of
the seven questions you've asked, five have been your own, haven't
they? No, really, I'm not sure, the narration is unclear about this.
"his
penetrating gaze" See? He's just sitting there eye chaining her
up and busting out the whips!
"“Are
you gay, Mr. Grey?”
He
inhales sharply, and I cringe, mortified. Crap.
Why
didn’t I employ some kind of filter before I read this straight
out? How can I tell him I’m just reading the questions?"
I would imagine because he can see the questions in your lap and that
you are reading them since he's already eye spanking you? Although
seriously Kate, your questions are awful. They've been getting more
and more personal, and Grey's been getting more and more terse. Ana
is apparently unable to read them in her mind really quickly while
Grey answers, and is just reading them blindly. I dunno about you,
but with a question as short as “are you gay?” I think I may have
absorbed what I was about to say before actually uttering the phrase.
Maybe that's just me though. Either way, this whole interview is just
a pile of awkward and eye bondage. Either way, Ana stammers out a
“sorry I didn't write these” which leads to her being outed as
not being on the paper at all, but being drafted, against her will,
by Kate who is sick. Then Blond Number Two (as the text has called
her) gives Grey a “next meeting two minutes” and he tells her to
trash it, he's not done with this fresh piece of ass.
Alright,
the tables are turned, and Ana drops another double-crap as he
declares that since she's gotten to ask him things he now gets to ask
her things, it is “only fair”. ... What? You're cancelling some
big important business meeting to poke and prod some girl? If I were
Ana, I would have stood up, said “Thank you for your time, but I've
actually gotten all I need, and I would just feel terrible if you
cancelled your meeting because of me!” and then ran. Very fast.
Then again, I'd make a terrible harlequin lead.
So,
he grills her on her plans and such a little and mentions the
internship program there (so he's offering a job to the chick he
OBVIOUSLY wants to bang. Classy. Sorry, I'm sure he just finds her
“interesting”) and then they wrap up and she peaces out. In what
MUST be less then two minutes. Which means he really didn't need to
cancel his meeting. Unless he REALLY needs to wank after this
meeting? We also get that she has a long drive home in the rain, so,
I imagine that Ana is about to total Kate's car or something.
Alright,
so he sees her OUT of the office, puts her coat on her, and presses
the elevator button for her and waits with her (NOT LIKE DREADLOCK
DUDE!) because she is Special and the author needs us to know that.
Sigh. She, meanwhile, is anxious to get far, far away from him, and
totally forgets that he's handing out her diploma and is all YAY
NEVER HAVE TO SEE HIM AGAIN but you WILL and he will be INSIDE you
Ana. It's best if you just come to terms with this now.
And
that's chapter one! I deem it an awkward start, and we have friction
between the two leads, which is good, but I wish the author had tried
to be a little more subtle (or diverse) about what a boner magnet
Grey is. Also, I find Grey kinda creepy so far. So far I hate the whole cast though, so that's a good sign. Hope you kids enjoyed reading this, and if you have any
thoughts/suggestions/comments, I'd love to read them!
*
And I still placed! Had I been able to actually talk, I would have
OWNED that thing!
**
I admit to not being incredibly knowledgeable on the topic of BDSM
and the relationships dynamics that go with it, so if anyone has a resource or wants
to give me a crash course on it so I can go into this better
informed, that would be lovely.
